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RE: Caffeine, Steroids, and Myrtle the Prostitute

in #writing7 years ago

Wow! I'm obviously not asking enough from you guys. The posts today are brilliant, and this is no exception. So, now I need to know, is Myrtle real? The house we just moved from, had a paved alley behind. We used to catch working girls there with guys in cars and chase them off at least two or three times a year. Great post, incredible writing, solid imagery, good layout. One Critique, your headline promised me three things, but I only saw one. Where were the caffeine and the steroids? Awesome post, definite contender for revenue share!

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Hey! Glad you liked it. I really worked on implementing your suggestions and used your critique from my previous writing to tighten things up. I definitely see how my writing has improved a ton (my wife’s an English lit major and likes the way I’ve been writing recently), thanks to you. I referenced the caffeine in the last few sentences at bottom(yeah I know-not enough right?) & tried to tie in steroids in with one of the memory mnemonics included in the method... I would have done more with the idea but was trying to keep the word count close to 250 as possible... oh btw Hemingway Editor is god! Hemingway was slapping my MacBook Air off the desk each time I ran on too long... loving #dolphinschool

Yeah, but it's limited. It's grammar suggestions are shit. LOL but, for readability NOTHING beats it, other than a good human editor.

yes Myrtle is real... right on the corner of 27th and GhatCha Ave..