"SteemitPoetryContest10": Inevitable Growth
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Inevitable Growth
Sparks of madness pierce upon thee
Succumbs the light of life you see
How torturous this mater would be
If none can confine it away from thee.
And now thy journey truly began
When stupidity has faded upon
The desert of immaturity of a man;
When age of tranquility lingers at dawn.
Thou shall let the past stay as past
And share the felicity one hast
For it's time thou shall accept and cast
That growth, its the only thing that'll last.
Yet again I thank you for reading another one of my outputs
I would greatly appreciate it if you share yours
It will be my pleasure if you take your time sharing what you think about this poem
I'm in love with the final Quadtrain however the first two I'm having difficulty understanding - the sentences are dis-conjunct to me
My apologies :'( I just noticed the typo's in the latter. Kindly re-read again, maybe this time it will be a bit better. Thank you for reading and sharing your time in this simple poetry of mine :).
haha you even made a rhyme at the end. Yeah, too easy. Us poets gotta stick together :P
'the dessert of immaturity of a man' I still don't quite understand.. Is the second quadtrain one whole sentence? Or is the fourth line a new sentence?
It's desert hehehe sorry again!! I honestly make a lot of typo's on my essays at school grrrrr.. I would absolutely check and recheck it next time..
And I even submitted it in a contest hahaha yet I have a lot of errors on spelling.. I guess I need to sleep now. It's al;ready 1:00 am in my country. Haven't slept properly for days. University life.
Yeah get some sleep, try again tmrw :D
Following you for more.
Thanks for your time sir and good uh mornight (morning and night) hehehe
May you have a pleasant day or calm evening :).
Really nice poem. I love the flow and how much feeling you get from it. fantastic. cant wait for more. also your choices of art are great :)
Oh thank you! I hope to create a poem which will make an impact to peoples lives and way of thinking but it always ends up as a sad one -_- or maybe it's just the way how I perceive it?
I think the first stanza can be a little sad but its a nice build up because the rest of the poem really gives off a feeling of power and motivation. i really liked it. You are already impacting people :) keep honing your skills. You have a great talent
This is beautiful!! What is the story behind this? For me, this read like the story of growing up, how you could drive yourself mad thinking about the past and all that you have lost or left behind, but part of growing up is accepting the past for what it is, because the only thing that stays the same, is that life is ever changing.
I love the line "The desert of immaturity of a man" - how vast, barren and endless immaturity can be. Wonderfully done.
Thank you! And exactly, this poetry is about growing up, how one person with self esteem who got caught up by his past can still change if he accept what life really is. It's a piece of our own reality. Thank again :)