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My apologies :'( I just noticed the typo's in the latter. Kindly re-read again, maybe this time it will be a bit better. Thank you for reading and sharing your time in this simple poetry of mine :).

haha you even made a rhyme at the end. Yeah, too easy. Us poets gotta stick together :P

'the dessert of immaturity of a man' I still don't quite understand.. Is the second quadtrain one whole sentence? Or is the fourth line a new sentence?

It's desert hehehe sorry again!! I honestly make a lot of typo's on my essays at school grrrrr.. I would absolutely check and recheck it next time..

And I even submitted it in a contest hahaha yet I have a lot of errors on spelling.. I guess I need to sleep now. It's al;ready 1:00 am in my country. Haven't slept properly for days. University life.

Yeah get some sleep, try again tmrw :D
Following you for more.

Thanks for your time sir and good uh mornight (morning and night) hehehe

May you have a pleasant day or calm evening :).

just wanna send m bye-bye's