With Best Friend
There she was for another day, sitting down by the lake with her dog. They say, that the dog is the best friend of humans. I do not know for sure. But, I think she knows that for sure.
Last summer, her friend invited her to a party. The music was loud, everyone was having a blast. It was the time of the year where they have just finished their exams and those were the final exams for graduating for university. They insisted to stay there for long. Until almost everyone decided to sleep there and leave in the morning.
That night was unlucky night! There was a huge fire in the place they were in. Nobody woke up at the beginning, except for her dog who was sitting outside. Fighting with his leash, he wanted to break that to warn everyone that there was a fire. The moment he was able to break the leash, it was too late, the fire was taking up a lot of the place. But, he ran inside looking for her and he was able to rescue her.
Since that day, every same day of the year, she goes by the lake with her dog and remember how she was miraculously was rescued.
You have a story, it's an interesting story, that you could develop. You left me tied to the computer. I thought the whole rescue, the screaming, the firemen, the tears, the near death and the rescue, the petting of the dog. I was expecting a lot from this story, can you flesh it out? Lots of plot to include and enjoy. I was shocked by some close repetitions of some words.
Don't stop writing.
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I did? I was not expecting that. Especially, given the fact that this was a part of a contest. So, it was not really a freewrite. But, someone has given the picture. So, I am limited with some context.
The rescue thing came along the way, while I was writing. So, I changed what I was writing because, it felt like it was more interesting to write about that.
The repetitions... Ummm.. That could because I was lacking some words. XD
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jj. I just found what you wrote good. Which left me wanting you to develop a bigger story. It's a good argument. And every text is a free expression.
The rescue came up while I was writing. So I changed what I was writing because I found it more interesting to write about.
That's the interesting thing, that you have the ideas. The writer's fiber. It's just starting to write and the words are coming to you.
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I am writing frequently now (I mean more frequent since the start of the SEA program).
I will take that as a compliment. Thanks =D
By the way, if you want to quote something that someone wrote, you can use (>) symbol which will put it in a nicer way.
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