I think it's a good tutorial in essence. I think some weaknesses you could improve are: adding sound, whether voice-over or directly recorded. Also, adding music might help us want to stay until the end of the video.
Nice drawing.
I invite you to check out this link for video editing challenges.

https://www.speem.watch/p/anailuj1992/sc-s26w1-edicion-de-videos-primeros-pasos