The Celtic accent was a bit jarring in print, but I guess that's unavoidable. I also think the red-haired witch's plea for mercy was a little bit... well, "cookie-cutter," but other than that moment the dialogue was great. I'm definitely looking forward to reading more.
Cheers for the feedback! Dialogue is not my strong point so I'm glad that you think it was great, despite the cookie-cutter wailing. As for the Celtic accent... any accents are of your own imagining! :D All I did was a bit a drunk slur on Mother, hehe. :)
Thank you for stopping by! I hope that you will enjoy the next chapter when it's ready to be posted. Which should be in a couple of days. I'm trying to leave a few days to a week between chapters.
I have read both chapters - and let me get a few trivial matters out of the way before I comment.
First of all, your link for the other chapter is not Steemit, but to Steempeak...which means I have to open your home page and click there to read (I do not know why, but steempeak does not open for me). I was wondering why, since you posted on Steemit, why do you want to force your reader to another platform?
Regarding achieving perfection...as a writer myself, I know that it does not matter how many times I read what I have written. Even after the 20th time, I will still find errors and changes needed so that the reader can understand what I have written about. Do you not have a friend who can read and comment for you? They do not need to be professors of lit. Even just a middling knowledge of the language and grammar, plus an interest in what they are reading and it should suffice for them to point out some of what needs to be improved. Having said that, I did not see any such failures, so maybe you are able to 'read' your own writing with an unclouded eye.
One of the most important lessons I learnt about writing - do not over-think, just write. Even if it is not worthy to be recorded as part of your story, it opens the mind and like a stream undammed, the waterfall of words will carry you back into the magic of unveiling your story. It is easy enough to return to delete what you are not happy with - easier than waiting and hoping the right words will come at that time.
Last point. Thanks to going to your home page, I discovered @steemydave. That means that today has started off beautifully, with the discovery of two minds I envy for the magic they know of in their imaginings.
After the above, you still expect me to comment on your writing? Really?
:)
I have resteemed so that my few readers can see that I do appreciate the writings of those who excel.
Thank you for stopping by with such a wonderful comment! I appreciate it so much. And @steemydave will be so happy that someone has found his writing! :D He's my partner and has been a bit disillusioned with steem lately. I encourage him to keep on writing though, that there are people out there who do read it and enjoy it, they just don't comment, and sometimes it's hard to comment -- I personally like a lot of things I read but can't articulate what it is I like about them, so curate silently.
I'm sorry though about the steempeak link. I've been using Steempeak to post instead of Steemit for some time now, and sometimes I forget that steemit even exists which is my bad. I'll update the links after I finish this comment. :) I understand -- I get so annoyed when people use busy.org links or esteem.app links! Haha! :D
It's only recently I've come to understand that perfection will never be attained. As a writer, I'm always learning, we're always learning. And if I keep trying to subject myself to such rigorous standards my writing will be killed by over-editing. Which is what happened to Book Two of this series -- I need to try and get my original feel back into it. Luckily Book One comes first!
I share my writing with a couple of other people as I go along, hoping to find constructive criticism. But I don't often receive any. Part of me hopes to find the occasional critique here on steem but I'm not really expecting any. Once the last chapter has been posted here, that's it. Book One complete and ready for self-publishing.
...do not over-think, just write. Even if it is not worthy to be recorded as part of your story, it opens the mind and like a stream undammed, the waterfall of words will carry you back into the magic of unveiling your story.
Another thing I have learnt over the past couple of years! :D Mostly thanks to here on steem, actually. I'm not sure if you're familiar with the @freewritehouse community? I found it difficult at first, but being able to write with the flow and to just keep on writing without stopping to think is truly an amazing ability.
Sorry, I'm writing an essay, haha. But thank you so much for stopping by and enjoying my writing, and for leaving a comment. I don't expect you to leave more comments, haha! But you are always welcome to. :)
The Celtic accent was a bit jarring in print, but I guess that's unavoidable. I also think the red-haired witch's plea for mercy was a little bit... well, "cookie-cutter," but other than that moment the dialogue was great. I'm definitely looking forward to reading more.
Cheers for the feedback! Dialogue is not my strong point so I'm glad that you think it was great, despite the cookie-cutter wailing. As for the Celtic accent... any accents are of your own imagining! :D All I did was a bit a drunk slur on Mother, hehe. :)
Thank you for stopping by! I hope that you will enjoy the next chapter when it's ready to be posted. Which should be in a couple of days. I'm trying to leave a few days to a week between chapters.
I have read both chapters - and let me get a few trivial matters out of the way before I comment.
First of all, your link for the other chapter is not Steemit, but to Steempeak...which means I have to open your home page and click there to read (I do not know why, but steempeak does not open for me). I was wondering why, since you posted on Steemit, why do you want to force your reader to another platform?
Regarding achieving perfection...as a writer myself, I know that it does not matter how many times I read what I have written. Even after the 20th time, I will still find errors and changes needed so that the reader can understand what I have written about. Do you not have a friend who can read and comment for you? They do not need to be professors of lit. Even just a middling knowledge of the language and grammar, plus an interest in what they are reading and it should suffice for them to point out some of what needs to be improved. Having said that, I did not see any such failures, so maybe you are able to 'read' your own writing with an unclouded eye.
One of the most important lessons I learnt about writing - do not over-think, just write. Even if it is not worthy to be recorded as part of your story, it opens the mind and like a stream undammed, the waterfall of words will carry you back into the magic of unveiling your story. It is easy enough to return to delete what you are not happy with - easier than waiting and hoping the right words will come at that time.
Last point. Thanks to going to your home page, I discovered @steemydave. That means that today has started off beautifully, with the discovery of two minds I envy for the magic they know of in their imaginings.
After the above, you still expect me to comment on your writing? Really?
:)
I have resteemed so that my few readers can see that I do appreciate the writings of those who excel.
Thank you for stopping by with such a wonderful comment! I appreciate it so much. And @steemydave will be so happy that someone has found his writing! :D He's my partner and has been a bit disillusioned with steem lately. I encourage him to keep on writing though, that there are people out there who do read it and enjoy it, they just don't comment, and sometimes it's hard to comment -- I personally like a lot of things I read but can't articulate what it is I like about them, so curate silently.
I'm sorry though about the steempeak link. I've been using Steempeak to post instead of Steemit for some time now, and sometimes I forget that steemit even exists which is my bad. I'll update the links after I finish this comment. :) I understand -- I get so annoyed when people use busy.org links or esteem.app links! Haha! :D
It's only recently I've come to understand that perfection will never be attained. As a writer, I'm always learning, we're always learning. And if I keep trying to subject myself to such rigorous standards my writing will be killed by over-editing. Which is what happened to Book Two of this series -- I need to try and get my original feel back into it. Luckily Book One comes first!
I share my writing with a couple of other people as I go along, hoping to find constructive criticism. But I don't often receive any. Part of me hopes to find the occasional critique here on steem but I'm not really expecting any. Once the last chapter has been posted here, that's it. Book One complete and ready for self-publishing.
Another thing I have learnt over the past couple of years! :D Mostly thanks to here on steem, actually. I'm not sure if you're familiar with the @freewritehouse community? I found it difficult at first, but being able to write with the flow and to just keep on writing without stopping to think is truly an amazing ability.
Sorry, I'm writing an essay, haha. But thank you so much for stopping by and enjoying my writing, and for leaving a comment. I don't expect you to leave more comments, haha! But you are always welcome to. :)
And thank you so much for the resteem!