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Really? It worked? I knew I wanted to do it and I heard the voice being very, very punctuated... But I tried to stick to normal English, still. Otherwise my original was with things like 'mah' instead of 'my', present continuous endin' without the 'g', etc.

And since I just had the time to post a... well, that would be a second draft... I am sure there be some inconsistency.

It takes time to practice and hone these skills. The key is not to overdo it.

Knowing that and succeeding in that are two things. Now I am very grateful for your feedback.