Hi @johnjgeddes
I tell you one thing i just normally read your story without thinking wheather I am goint to read full or not but when i started and read a 4 - 5 lines then i gained a interested and i am not able to stop myself and i readed a full story .
The way you write and the way you express the feeling and the little things happen in that moment like you embarrassed and you face become red these all things add a feel and interest in the story.
great man, I really follow you if I get this kind of stuff from your side.