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RE: Plainclothes Prophets [Day 14]

in #twbpoetrycontest7 years ago

This poem bowled me over @carmalain7

The surreal and unique imagery

conjoined twin cars holding hands on the beltway

really underpins the disillusionment expressed by the poem. Your use of extended metaphor creates a fantastic story board of images

the line of chalk erased away

which finally comes round to – ‘erasure susurrus’. Then this imagery continues subtly throughout, creating a thematic tone. really liked it m8 :-)

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thank you thank you, Raj, always honored when my scrawlings get a read from a writer I admire, and your writing certainly fits that! z_thank_you.png