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RE: ADSactly Short Story - The Pull of the Pool.

in #story6 years ago

Excellent story, @royalrose. I congratulate you for weaving and taking the story very well and making each part something different and interesting. I liked that you went back from the present to the past and then back to the present. That structure gives some cyclic mobility to history. The fact that you started with a pessimistic and sad air, and then told what happened to Ada, and from her experience revive hope in our protagonist, was a good resource! Especially because we see this character as if he were really a "fairy" who comes to change or give color to the world of Ada.
Nkasi. In this story there are several interesting points to explore: the increasingly terrible situation of some young people who, although they have been the best students in their classes, do not find the best jobs, and may even be unemployed. On the other hand, the unjust pressure that women have to marry before a certain age and how sometimes this can become a matter of life or death for her. And the other, as a consequence of the above, the issue of being able to marry a dead person. Thank God that the family was not so blind and avoided that tragedy. With the end of your story I begin the week loaded with better expectations. If I don't catch this bus, surely others will come and go to better places. The idea is not to give up and keep hoping for something better! Thank you for your story and @adsactly for sharing it!

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Wow, thank you very much. I'm really impressed by how you broke it down to bits that tell the messages I was trying to pass across. Thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts. I appreciate you.