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RE: 3:33 (Original Short Story)

in #story8 years ago

hmm...I would have narrated the story in the first person mode and then the shock of seeing himself in the bed would have more impact. Also I find first person mode of narration impacts the reader more , unless, of course, you're going to be weaving back and forth in time and space. A novel idea nonetheless :)

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Thanks for the feedback. This is experimental writing for something that I am planning that will be a larger story.