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RE: The Apparition (An Original Story/Poem) by: BiiBii

in #story7 years ago

If you know how to edit:

The sky has changed to rust

the word 'has' should be 'had' since all your poem is in the past tense.

Other than that tiny mistake, I must say I liked it.

I also like that you did not try to explain it, sometimes writers do and they should not, leave it to the imagination of the reader.

I hope my comment has encouraged you, as I intended. (I've done a follow so that I get to read your next ones)

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aye! Thank you for helping me out with my mistake. :D I'm glad you liked it.

Followed back!