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RE: SML Feedback Contest Round 4 | A DSound Community Initiative
Hello everyone. Here's my new submission. Enjoy listening! Already curious to get at least one opinion.
https://steemit.com/dsound/@joymatters/20180227t214605152z-claras-retro-vibe
I have given a good couple of listens to your tune. I do not know anything about the Cord Challenge as I have not yet had time to look into it yet. but without knowing what the goal is there, i am gonna give my feedback just as is on the track you have presented @joymatters !
That being said, your tune really settled in for me in the 2nd half of the tune. I am a true lover of lofi electronics but i really wanted something more from this track at the beginning. so i would say i guess i am saying, you can bring us in with something more! or perhaps, something less.... What if your synth line was all broken and choppy. and the same with the beats, missing pieces, choppy and more disruptive, then as the tune builds, it all comes together and starts to grove how you have it. maybe this broken beat and synth intro could last 30 seconds to a minute. hell maybe longer. i bet you could find some good broken rhythms that you would enjoy the dance around, on its way to full groove.
This tune wants to be a power house and can be. but it is not yet there yet for me. you are only working with these two instruments and so there for, they have room to be bigger and fill the space. as well, this mix is not yet there, but with the time taken to EQ, add beef, some mixing technics, and more time, i believe you could find a big ass beautiful monster up in this peice!
It has all the attitude needed. just take the time to grow it!
This is what I am hearing and feeling. i hope this serves you and puts some ideas in your head to grow this bad mamajama!
I also feel that there's enough space to be filled. It's a decent feedback! Thanks for listening and for your efforts!
Hello, I must begin saying that I didn't liked it. However, when the track finally builds up I got that retro feel I assume you where looking for. I think there is much work ahead to make this piece great, so I wont point out the details but the concepts that you should take in consideration next time. The first is the silence, music is made by the arrangement of sounds and silences, so to get the listener a break the mid range instruments ( melodic and harmonic instruments ) shall not be playing all the time, or at least not at the same level ( volume and intensity). which takes me to the second concept, low range instrument like bass or big drums are often the base of the son so, the brain is used to (and likes to) hear the melodies on top of a base or basic sound, in your case it takes too long to get there (but as I said before when it builds up it is awesome). Now, I actually don't know what the chord challenge was about, but I am sure that if you keep those things in mind you will get some kick ass beats. Hope I didn't get too heavy, and sorry if the english is not perfect, keep rocking!