Poem / August Swim
August swim
All the dorsal muscles flex
My arm is lifted
One stroke leading the next
In the water I'm driftin'
Four strokes gone by
Head up Take a breath
I'm unfit I'm going to die
This water's freezing
It makes my heart stop beating
Every lap is more difficult than the last
My legs are unfit from when I was in a cast
I need to catch up to the rest
I'm really trying my best
Might've helped if I ate breakfast
Guess after the twentieth lap I'll just passout
It's been four months since I swam last
The august water is like a brain blast
It's still technically winter
I really can't endure
Finally it's the last set
Then I can get out
Dry my head
And head home to my bed
By Ethan
2017/08/02
Dude why is august so called where you are :D?
I am in south Africa in the southern hemisphere so our winter is June, July august
In a way swimming laps is like life. Each lap gets harder, the swimmer gets tired and weaker, but despite it all he makes it and accomplishes what he set out to do. It takes determination, guts and hard work but he reached his goal. Now he can rest! I like the concept, "never give up"! Have a great day tomorrow!
Thank you :)
Awesome water in great colour
Chilling and freezing the nerves,
Reclining the body in the parlour,
Technically winter but requires verves.
Nice poetic rendition
You can follow back @baboyed1000
Thank you, I love it when comments are little poems :)
Very nice, I have been reading quite a bit of poetry on here. Not something I originally thought I would do on steemit, but you know what, it's pretty cool.
Steemit is a place of wonders ;)
Aww. I'm freezing just while watching this photo :-D
hehe I'm sorry XD
Thats feels me cold..totally Amazing Nice work..👌
Check mine https://steemit.com/poetry/@funnystuff/poem-happiness
Takecare
Will do thank you :)
Great poem, really enjoyed reading this.
I've written a short poem maybe you can check it out?
Upvoted
Will do :)
Very much beautifully decorated the motive of the poem. If we compare ourselves to the same situation, in the ocean of steemit, all of us are in the same state. Thanks for the nice gift and message to the users. Thanks.
that was so beautiful :) upvoted!
follow and i follow you! :D
You wrote it yourself??????😮😮
Of course :)
I must say you are really good.. I liked how you put the words into the poem... I ain't joking but making a poem with rhyming words is not a piece of cake.. Many can't do it. It needs vast knowledge of vocabulary. You cracked it mate..😉 its really good
Thanks mate, Once you start doing it often the words just flow :)