and i cant make sense of the
flood that swelled in my chest
poured through my arms and out my fingers
till it smashed us both
and washed our words away
This poem is in no way cheesy,dflo. Some really wonderful work in metaphor and I love your tone. It is special and unique ... there is a captured real life feel to it and yet an expansive nature. Not cheesy:)
Thank you! I was feeling a bit melodramatic with it i guess. Its to a person ( I very often write to people with my poems) and so I was feeling vulnerable about it as well... Maybe I should just say , 'with this poem" at the end.
It is a very strong write ... there is absolutely no reason that I can see to feel vulnerable about or to apologize for it. It's great:)