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in #poetry7 years ago

Today I thought I'd share something that is incredibly close to me.. one of the first poems I'd ever written. This is something I haven't shown many people, but I thought I'd take the plung and share it!

Three words, eight letters

Three words, eight letters. You’re asking how
Simple? Understated lines, escaped from lips.
Three words with such great power, he’s now
Hushing you from the motion of fingertips.

Three words, eight letters, you’re questioning why?
Eight letters of dominance over one's heart.
Young simply ageing, as time passes by
Breaking if even a moment apart

Three words, eight letters, its written in stone
Carved by the once Mighty, soon to be fallen.
Etched. A proclamation, the wind has blown
Whispering in the ear, harsh words won’t soften

Three words, eight letters, that’s all they ever were
Bittersweet. Released silently from her.

This was one of the first sonnets I wrote, so I'd love all feeback on ways I can improve

Have a wonderful day

XoXo E

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Thank you! :)

Its really wonderful, the diction of your poetry is amazing!

Why thank you very much!

Really good liz post moreee

looking forward to it yay