Hello paholags,
A great story. You have a strong foundation for this story. The setting of Caruao, coupled with the paranormal elements, creates a fascinating backdrop. You’ve built a world where the supernatural feels believable and connected to the character's personal journey. Your ability to create tension and unease is noticeable.
But you can encounter a dumb reader like me. So would you consider the transition between the past and present of Odin’s story? It is somewhat jarring for me. It would be helpful to clarify if Odin is the original priest or a replacement.
Also I was wondering if you could consider providing a little more context to the nature of character the Odin has converted into. And then I reas your explanation about Siberian Husky in one your reply. How about including it in the story and let the readers figure out for themselves 😜
Wish you more luck!
¡Holaaa amigo!🤗
No te consideres tonto. Si algo me ha enseñado la lectura es que todas las personas que dedican parte de su tiempo a leer, tienen un nivel de sabiduría fascinante porque tomar la decisión de sumergirse en las letras, nos enriquece el conocimiento.
Ten la certeza de que a partir de ahora sí tendré en consideración esas acotaciones que mencionas, porque he meditado en la mejora que tendría esta historia aplicándolos así que, para la próxima te prometo aplicarlas.
Agradezco mucho tu apoyo... Un fuerte abrazo💚