Fallen

in #life7 years ago (edited)

The girl was singing on the stage beneath the sky that was long lost to her The sky descended and the light was gone

The clouds took the charge and moistened her eyes
The darkness took over and she stepped into the cave

She opened the door of her room
She saw defeat lay again on the bed in front

The storm was banging the door
Elephants again had thumped their heavy feet on her chest and roared
A python penetrated her stomach

When she came to her senses
The storm has subsided
The roof and the walls of her room had all vanished

But there were holes in her breast
She cast an intent look

Holes are there in the breasts of all women
She was no exception


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Nice poem. It has a great idea. Thanks for sharing.

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Nightmarish scenario that can only be washed away by comforting embrace of the light. Nicely written @honeychum

Thanks buddy for your feedback. I appreciate it. @badmusgreene

My pleasure @honeychum.

"Holes are there in the breasts of all women
She is no exception" sounds horrible.
What exactly do you mean by these lines?

It is gods gift to women but here its used in context to the brutality of the rape. @shagungupta

With a lot of pleasure,pride and pain a woman except those holes to feed her child. i wanted you to explain that only.

Thanks mate.

story? wew that so scary
"Holes are there in the breasts of all women
She was no exception"

wew i can't imagine it :(

Its the sad reality my friend :( @witul4r

A very poignant and expressive poem, @honeychum . Each line is evocative. And a great sketch to illustrate it :) .

Thanks Neha.

Es mágico y místico este poema, @honeychum. Esa última estrofa recoge la idea de lo caído y de lo vuelto a nacer. Heridas de guerra que siempre llevan las mujeres. Gracias por compartir.

Muchas gracias amigo. Solo quería expresar y sentir lo que una mujer atraviesa en los momentos de impotencia y nosotros, los hombres que les prometimos a sus madres que siempre cuidarán de una madre, son la razón de su explotación. @nancybriti

Que buenas palabras que buen dibujo el mejor post de la semana sin duda alguna, el dibujo esta muy bien en cuanto a proporciones y sombras te felicito ;)

Muchas gracias amigo. :)

Sweet Poem! but little bit sad, beautiful expressiOn of girl..

I know Sana that it is sad but so is the reality.

Heyy !! Did you draw this and write this poetry !! Amazing work !!

And i see you are from Ludhiana !! That’s awesome 😃

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First of all, I would like to thank you for taking time to check my post. I am a big fan of your work. Poetry is mine but I did not draw this sketch. I wish I had that talent :(

Thanks for liking my work :) Haha, you already are talented !!! Keep it up.

Thanks buddy. :)

Image is beautiful ......while poetry is heart wrentching. Still the poetry is really gud

Thanks Shreya, I am glad that you liked it and thanks for resteem. @shreya