Your story is amazing, and the message you want to deliver is definitely something to be taken very seriously. Our Earth is on the verge of annihilation just because of the critically lethal activities of the Saipans.
Coming to your way of writing . well, this is something I can call a delightful read. Your way of describing the surroundings and similes you used to enhance the impact are perfect. I read the full article just because of this poetic description of the ambiance. It feels magically real.