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RE: The Diary Game || 26 March 2025 || I helped the workers with our wheat threshing work.

in STEEM FOR BETTERLIFElast month

Imagine you keep a diary is this what you would write

Assalamu Alaikum. A beautiful day.how are you all?I hope everyone is very well by the grace of Allah and living a very beautiful life. Alhamdulillah I am also very well by the grace of Allah.Let's get started then.

The first sentences are the most important it's what should attract a reader. Even if I ignore the lines I just cited, the next ones don't make sense to me. Did you reread what you wrote?

I woke up very early at around 4 am to eat Sehri. Then the first thing I wanted to hear was the sound of Salam. The sound was very annoying. So I turned it off from my mobile. After turning it off, I called my parents to wake me up to eat Sehri. Then I went to brush my teeth and after brushing my teeth, I ate Sehri.

Let's see:
you woke up early around 4 am and eat Sehri
You turned off your mobile because you felt annoyed
You called your parents to tell them to wake you up, although you are already to eat again Sehri...
You brushed your teeth and ate Sheri again and didn't brush your teeth

How many times did you eat? What you wrote doesn't make sense neither does the next alinea. My tip for you is write shorter test, something interesting to read. IN your case short is the best and it would be great if the title fits to what you talk about.

A great day with easier text

P.s. if you help the "workers" doesn't that mean that you are a worker?

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