Welcome to week 3:
" Condensed Love & Dating Classifieds"
Entry N° 1 ✍

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@dove11 I appreciate your use of the almost literal format of classified ads. Although, considering short fiction, it's good to ask yourself whether numbers and addresses contribute to the story or are unnecessary. At least in the first one, I feel the word Aquarius and 49 go very well; we imagine a personality. I wish I could write with such a respectful tone of voice; it lends its truth.

However, when reading the translation of the second ad, I feel you lacked a certain "malice." Although the message is a clear invitation to any man that, if he accepts, he'll receive free rides in exchange for other favors. Both stories are very good.

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