Beautiful.
What a pleasant read! You personalize your approach based on your experience and, at the same time, you whetted my appetite for learning and knowledge. I was fascinated by the ease with which you explained Japanese/Chinese writing and phonetics.
The achievement of constructing this message about change and encoding it in those beautiful characters is interesting.
You invite us to overcome karma by ridding ourselves of it, and to climb the "steep mountain" once we reach the summit and cross it.
I like your translation.
I'm thrilled to receive such detailed feedback - thank you very much, José. I'm glad you found the technical parts easy to follow; I worried they might come off as too dense.
I guess interpreting a poem can be just as challenging (and rewarding) as crafting one :-)