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RE: The Scraper: Part 2 - Death Becomes Him
Your descriptions of medical conditions and trauma are spot on, I was fully immersed while reading for the most part! This sentence took me out of it as I had to figure out what you meant:
Without his company upgrades his own medichines would have already started to put his body into a Medically Controlled Death, but the upgrade meant that he could carry on functioning for long after the average human in the same situation.
Moving on to part 3!
~ Mako
Thank you Mako for your feedback!
I view comments like these as extremely valuable as it helps me to assess how well I'm getting my point across thank you.
I was trying to point out that the company medichine upgrades were above standard, simply because they want you to be able to work past the point a 'normal' human being would be able to.
Kind of like a futuristic version of a truck driving firm giving you speed pills to allow you to drive longer than anyone else.
Looking forward to more comments! :-)
Cg