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RE: Constrained Writing Contest #24 + Winners of Constrained Writing Contest #23

https://steemit.com/metzli/@queto50/restricted-writing-contest-24
Here I bring you the story of alex a boy who thought they had forgotten their day until the night arrived I hope they like it is very funny
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a boy called alex but in realia was called alexis was in his day and his father and he go make a fist ahpressed ah alex he did not know anything he thought that everyone had forgotten his birthday alex was very sad xq nobody said anything alex came out towards school and none of his classmates were close to him
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Alex was very lonely and felt very sad the class was over and alex desanimous is going to his house his mom did not let him pass so in xq alex is iva ah give an account of the party solpresa that he was doing alex very angry shouts ah his mom and she sent him to where his grandmother alex shouts at him that he does not want them to forget his day and they took him to where his grandmother
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Alex was very happy because he thought that his grandmother was the only one who remembered that today was his day. Alex begins to tell him his grandmother that everyone had forgotten that today was his day. Alex was sad and happy at the time because he had a great time with her grandmother the time passed and it was time to take her to Alex to her house Alex told her grandmother that he wanted to stay with her the grandmother told him Alex you have to go home with your mom and dad Alex told him that it was fine when they were arriving they were all the lights off alex says let's go that they are asleep the grandmother tells him go let's go in when they open the door Alex takes a big surprise
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Alex is in cho because he thought that nobody remembered his day Alex goes crazy and starts screaming all over the house happy because Alex thought nobody remembered his day Alex starts hugging all his friends and friends that his mother had invited Alex hugs her mom and says he loves her that day for alex at first was fatal after he took the surprise that was making his mom that was the best day for alex the juice with all his friends and friends alex was very very happy he had eaten cake, he played blind hen, hit his tail ah, bull and many games more Alex was already exhausted in so much game that Alex had realized that this was his worst day until the time of surprise arrived alex poses very good and happy

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Hi! :D

There's plenty of grammar mistakes in your story, and also the use of the word "Happy", which is prohibited this week. I didn't read the story in full yet, but will do soon.

Thank you for your entry!

Grandma's are the best. You used the word happy :(

That disqualifies you...

Thanks for trying though - did you use a translator?