Steemit Challenge s26wk2- Mysterious Roommate

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After a long time of staying alone Timothy felt relieved seeing someone that will stay with him, but what he saw in Ronnie's bag kept him wondering whom he is.

As weeks rolls by, Timothy didn't see any tangible thing Ronnie was doing with all those tools but it was confusing to see an importer / exporter making using of all those tools.
One day , when Ronnie's went out Timothy secretly installed a CCTV in Ronnie's room in order to know what he was up to.

Ronnie's was asleep when his phone rang and it was an urgent call demanding his presence,Ronnie's checked his time and it was late he was confused because he didn't want any unnecessary questions from Timothy demanding to know who called him and where he will be going to by that time of the night.

Ronnie's phone kept on ringing nonstop, he summoned courage and went to Timothy's room to inform him that his going to clear his goods from custom, Timothy requested to go with him but he declined and he zoomed off with that tools bag.

At this time , Timothy was convinced that Ronnie's is into Robbery and not what he claimed he was. But since there's no concrete evidence Timothy doesn't want to involve the security personnel. He started being serious on Ronnie's way about.

Ronnie's stayed for one month outside home without anybody reaching him . And Timothy became more worried.

One night after a month that Ronnie left the house he came back with new clothes and everything new. Even bought some clothes for Timothy.

Timothy asked where Ronnie went for a whole one month without being reachable. Ronnie told him how custom officers seized his goods worth billions and locked him up, until his business associate helped him out. One thing was shocking Ronnie didn't come back with his bag of tools. When Timothy asked he lied that the custom officers seized the bag. Wow !.

Their friendship became stronger after Ronnie explained his misfortunes in the hands of the custom officers. They were eating together in the seating room watching television when it was announced that heavy armed robbery took place at the border and left so many officer dead. Fortunately the robbers left some of their tools and ran away.

Timothy called the attention of Ronnie asking if what they are seeing in the television is not his tools bag. Ronnie denied knowing what Timothy was taking about. Timothy told him to be ready as they will watch the news again by evening, Ronnie convincingly told Timothy that custom officers sized his own bag maybe someone has used the bag to blackmail him.
Before evening Ronnie disconnected their seating room television and they missed the evening news.

When Timothy stepped outside the news was all over the newspaper with a whooping promise to anyone that can give useful information using the bag and some other pictures.

When Timothy returned to the house he continued to ask Ronnie about his tools bag, when the question about his bag became so disturbing to Ronnie he planned to kill Timothy so that he wouldn't expose him.

One night when Timothy was sleeping Ronnie woke him up and pleaded they discuss in his own room since CCTV was there there's nothing Timothy should be afraid of, Ronnie lured him in the bathroom and strangled him. He disposed Timothy's remains without any trace.

He was comfortable, since no other person knows about the bag he felt safe and was working freely.

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One day the police stumbled into his apartment luckily they saw the hidden CCTV that was mounted in Ronnie's room without his consent everything was revealed and they handcuffed Ronnie to the station.
And the rest was story.

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Steemit Challenge Season 26 Week-2: Mysterious Roommate

Dear @okere-blessing, below is the detailed assessment of your submission.

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish4.75/5Excellent
Originality & Uniqueness3/3Excellent
Presentation0.85/1Good
My observation0.9/1By resolving everything through the CCTV reveal, you made the ending neat, but also too easy.
Total9.5/10

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  • You used melodrama and suspicion effectively, which the original narrative sets up but I couldn't fully believe the logic of the plot (like Ronnie forgetting the CCTV, or suddenly coming back rich after a month).

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He was not around when the CCtV was installed, he was totally not aware of it. It was only Timothy that knows about the CCTV . It was obvious that his going out after receiving that call that made him stayed outside for a month was a robbery operation that was why he came back rich. Hahahaha.

Ouh My Goodness!!!

This story is so convincing in my mind already and this what many people face in life, having friends who they don't really trust or know their kind of business and when they eventually knows, got kill in order not to expose the culprit. I'm so amazed reading this story ma'am, it's more like I'm watching a movie 🎥 as I'm already having an imaginary view of how the happening was.
Good Luck 🤞

Hey @okere-blessing
How are you I hope you doing well I read your story I like it because at the last it's very interesting and I can't imagine this end but it hits . I also participate in this contest u visit and see my creativity I hope u like it.

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