Steemit Challenge s26wk2- Mysterious Roommate


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Mysterious Roommate

Breaking the silence of the evening, Roni pulled out a heavy weight from under the bed in the pale light coming through the window. Timothy was quietly looking through the crack in the door, the evening light falling on the sharp objects inside the bag made Timothy's face even more illuminated. Seeing the sharp metal objects, Timothy's chest trembled with fear. Timothy started thinking to himself, "How can a businessman have these things?" Timothy's body started to go numb with fear, his hands and feet went cold. . And he thought to himself, "Who is Roni and is he really a businessman or something else?"

Timothy bravely opened the door and faced Roni in the dark room. And he asked, "What are you doing in this dark room?" And what do you have with you? If you are in business, then why do you have so many sharp metal objects, guns?"

Roni then turned on the lights in the room, put the black bag under the bed, looked Timothy in the eyes and replied with a smile, "Do you always use a notebook and pen for business purposes, sometimes you have to use them for business purposes?" Roni paused for a moment, then smiled again and said, "What you see with your eyes may not always be true." He said again, "You have only seen the outside, you have not seen the inside yet."

Saying this, Roni left the room.

Hearing Roni's words, Timothy paused. More doubts arose in his mind. Timothy began to get scared. Seeing Roni's unusual behavior.

Roni often went out late at night. Sometimes he returned home in the middle of the night and sometimes he returned home in the early morning. As the day went on, Roni's behavior became more suspicious. One day, Timothy could not hold himself back and asked him, "Who are you really?" When do you go out at night and return home again? Are you really a businessman and what business do you often have at such a late hour?

Roni paused and answered, "Who am I, a thief, a spy, a robber, a murderer, or anything else?" No, who knows all of these?

Hearing Roni's words, Timothy got scared. Timothy was a kind-hearted person, so he got scared a little. Timothy thought that Roni might do business at night. But he immediately realized that Timothy was wrong. Roni actually lives a double life. He does business during the day and does something else behind a mask at night.

One night, Timothy saw Roni fighting with someone. The sound of gunshots. Roni was running.

So Timothy asked Roni again, "What are you doing?" "Why are you using me to do bad things in my house?"

Then Roni replied, "The face behind the mask is always visible." If you know who I am, you will not tolerate me. If you believe me, you can do it. If you hate me, you can do it.

One day, the phone on the table rings again in the middle of the night. Timothy wakes up. And he sees Ronnie coming like a shadow and answering the phone. In the silence of the night, a strange voice comes from the other side of the phone and Timothy hears the target is ready. Timothy's body goes numb. Ronnie says Timothy's purpose is not to be afraid, I am involved in an organization that uses sharp knives and guns to benefit people in a dark world. Then Timothy starts wondering if Ronnie is actually a murderer or a spy or a double agent for good hidden in the dark.

One morning, Timothy wakes up and finds an envelope on the table. There is blood on the envelope. Timothy opened the envelope and saw a letter. The letter said, "Look, there's a bunch of keys on the table door, which are the keys to the locker. Open the locker and see my real identity. Who am I?"

Timothy didn't open the locker. Timothy wondered if Ronnie's identity was really inside the locker, or maybe not. Ronnie might be fooling me. As soon as Timothy opened the locker, he saw a mask. Which surprised Timothy and could never be Ronnie's identity.

The strange thing was, in the middle of the night, Timothy felt Ronnie's shadow on the other side of the window in the light breeze, a strange smile and a strange voice. Which still rings in Timothy's ears. Timothy felt that Ronnie had not disappeared. He had just disappeared.

Ronnie remained a mysterious mark in Timothy's life. An unresolved sign - was he just a business roommate, or a fraud, or a spy. Timothy realized that he would never be able to grasp the truth about Ronnie. Roni lived a double life, either as a good agent behind the mask who benefits people or as a terrible villain from the dark world behind the mask who harms people. And Ronnie remained a mysterious unresolved chapter in Timothy's life. Which Timothy would never be able to solve.

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I would like to invite my three friends

@imranhasan
@tanvirahammad10
@saifulislam

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Steemit Challenge Season 26 Week-2: Mysterious Roommate

Dear @jannatakter24, below is the detailed assessment of your submission.

CriteriaMarksRemarks
Story start to finish4.6/5Good
Originality & Uniqueness3/3Excellent
Presentation0.9/1Good
My observation0.85/1The mask in the locker was a great symbol, but you didn't explain its meaning clearly enough. It left me confused rather than intrigued.
Total9.35/10

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  • The ending didn't feel earned. Instead of mystery, it left me thinking you didn't know where to take Ronnie's character.

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