Wordsmiths Fiction Week 3: The Last Photo | Steemit Challenge Season 24

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Picking up the story from where a writter stopped....

The search was to no avail but still unsatisfying for the parents of Nadeesha.
While the rest of the crew were waiting for the others to join them, they became worried why the other crew members didn't return. Nadeesha's both parents were part of that crew who didn't return. The remaining crew were curious to know the reason , whether good or bad. They started screaming the names of some of the members of the other search crew but only heard echoes of thier own voices. No response.

One of the crew members notice something about the place that the camera was picked.

"Here" hes said. "I feel tensed anytime I walk across these two trees."
The crew members dismissed his observation, saying it was just an illusion his mind created. But he insisted that the crew members should go check for themselves. Three of the crew members decided to try and the testify that it was true, what was said before. They felt tensed. They had printed out the last photo which Nadeesha took , so they brought it out to confirm if the spot was in the photo..
Surprisingly, that same spot was where the hut and the creature stood. In between the two trees.

This made the place more creepy. One of the crew members who knew how to to operate a camera decided to move to where they took the camera,put it on his face like he was going to take a picture . Immediately, he shouted "come and see ,come and see!!!!.
The creepy hut in the photo was there but the creature wasn't.
After all the members in the crew check to confirm, some started peeing on themselves, some threw up being terrified.
The photographer in the crew asked one person who looked bold enough to go stand at where the hut was while he will use the camera to direct him. Since the hut could only be seen with the camera lense. The man agreed, but with a little fear he went there..

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The photographer was going to make him enter the hut through the door, to see what would happen. But he didn't tell him. The rest of the crew members watched in anxiety but afraid of what might go wrong. As the man walked in through the door. The photographer could still see him. But the crew member started shouting that he had disappeared. The photographer dropped the camera from his face, look at where the man was standing, but he didn't see him. He put the camera bak on his face and saw the man still there. He told him not to move right or left but walk backwards out of there. And the man did as he was told. Just in a moment, the crew members shouted again in relief and anxiety * "he's back".*
But the photographer wanted to know where that hut would lead to. So he asked the man to go in again. But the man refused.
And the photographer decide to follow through with the camera and asked anyone who wanted to join him to follow his foot steps.But no one follow
ed. So he went in alone witn the camera.

At some point, he turned back to check those who followed him. But to his greatest surprise,he found troops of demonic looking creatures with no head, covered in black ropes running after him. He held the camera firm in his hands as he ran, but his steps were gradually reducing as he was finding it difficult to move. The creatures drew closer and closer to him as he couldn't move again . He fell on his face, then the creatures came to him , they didn't say anything but took him. He had become so weak that he didn't know what was going on around him. It was as if he had slept off.

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He got to realize himself after some moments which felt like days passed to him. When he looked around and he saw a different world around him. But at where he was, he saw many faces of people he knew who had either died or disappeared from the village. Then when he looked closely, he saw faces of people from the search team . He even saw both of Nadeesha's parents. But they were crying . He approached them to ask why there were crying, but most especially if they had found Nadeesha. They gave him a negative reply "Nadeesha was going to return to the family again as a baby." He asdke them what it meant. They told gim that the photo Nadeesha took was a forbidden thing. No one in the village was supposed to take a photo of these creatures. But she did. And that the punishment for that was death. But since the forefathers of Nadeesha had a covenant with those spirits in time past. They would forgive her and reincarnate her back to them. But in the next five generations to come.....
He asked them where all those silly stories were coming from. They told him that a group of those creatures. The ones who could speak,but in vibrating and echoing tones, came to them and told them that. And that they with the other crew members arrived there the same way he arrived.

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He was curious to know if there would be going back home. So he asked.
They told him that it was certain they would go back home, that night was going to fall on them soon and they would find themselves just in the middle of those trees where the hut was.

Just like it was said the night fall came. And they all slept off without knowing. Next, the found themselves waking up one by one around they two trees, where the hut stood. Then they started persiving an unbearable stinking odour and when looked around, they saw a body lying lifeless. When they drew closeer, it was swollen.... " Ahhhhhh my daughter" the both parents of Nadeesha shouted in pity, when they saw that it was Nadeesha lying there , Dead.

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They couldn't be consoled enough. Some members of the crew shoke thier head in pity and dismair. Although those creatures which they believed to be spirits of thier forefathers told them that thier daughter Nadeesha would reincarnate. They were not still comforted.
The story of to which if Nadeesha was reborn lies in the tales yet to be told....

Thanks for reading through @us-andrew...

I'll like to invite @sampson01 @jasga and @saviour-moses to participate in the contest...

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Hello @us-aandrew, thank you so much for taking part in Week-3 of the Steemit Challenge - Season 24! We truly appreciate the time and creativity you put into your entry. Your assessment, including feedback and scores based on our evaluation criteria, is provided below.

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Story Setting & Word-Building: The story started at weak note and continued at the same pace around the crew members and their activities.2/3
Theme & Message: There was no solid reasons provided for the crew's activity or their efforts in finding the protagonist.1.5/2
Formatting & Presentation: It was okay1.5/2
Originality & Uniqueness: I missed fictional touche in this story despite the fact you could turn it in a powerful one2/3
Total7/10

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